Wood Elf playbook

[Smurf]

About the balls to the wall style... I need to update it, found a few things out. Just clarifications really and some other tip.

I think you are confused Smurf, they are talking about the new Wood Elf playbook that I have written? It is linked at the top of the page, this isnt about the one you wrote.

Please have a read through though and offer a critique.

A good read. I like that your playbooks are well thought out and are certainly more substantial than most on Plasmoid's site. I really liked your Lizard one.

As a bonus extra, I'd like to see some consideration given to tournament team builds and skill selections for some of the more popular formats (eg. six normal skills and 5 normal and a double etc).

Thanks for the positive feedback. I think I will stay clear of the tourney stuff though, even though it would be quite a nice addition. I just dont like the idea that if I covered all the different tourney rules and proposed starting rosters for all of them that people would use them religiously. I'm not a tourney player myself either so I'm not in the best position to offer advise about that and I also believe that part of the fun of tourneys is choosing your roster, I wouldnt like to think I would be taking away from that.

But thanks for the suggestion.

I did but it appears I failed to post it.

Writing style mainly is my critique. Shorter paragraphs would make it a lot easier to read, currently it looks terrifying. Watch out for repetition and for over explanation.

Nice to see it though, it's been a long time waiting

[Ullis]

Nice writing!

I think you confused Stakes on Zara with Stab. Stakes add +1 to armour rolls vs. undead teams. Stab is a different skill.

[garion]

Nice writing!

I think you confused Stakes on Zara with Stab. Stakes add +1 to armour rolls vs. undead teams. Stab is a different skill.

Zara has stakes and Stab, Stakes adds +1 to av agaisnt undead teams but she also has the stab ability.

[JaM]

Hey, it's not my first language so there are probably better ways to 'smoothen' the text a bit. I like the advice written so far, it's good. It's just that the sentences are a tad long and the text flows better when those long sentences are hacked up a bit so that you dont have to maybe reread the whole part tosee what was the point again.

I couldn't agree more, as said this is only a first draft, will need a fair bit of re-wording to trim it down all over. This draft is basically just a long stream of thoughts spewing on to a page. Hence the long sentances and general ramblings of a mad man

Point taken. I'll see if I can add more constructive critisism then...

[garion]

Bump, made a few tiny changes, just spelling mistakes etc... Will do the second draft on saturday.

[Jimmy Fantastic]

I can't open this with Adobe Reader, it says either not a supported file type or it is damaged.
Any suggestions? I would like to give it a read.

[garion]

It is a microsoft word document. Try right clicking on it and saving it to your desk top maybe, then pick a program to open it with. if you have MS word and it still doesnt work, it is probably coz you have an old version of MS office. Go to their website and there is a patch you can download to convert word 2009 documents to word 1997 etc..

[Jimmy Fantastic]

I needed the converter, cheers.
I gave it a quick scan, looked good(obviously).
I would Capitalize Elf every time you refer to them however (Elf stall, only Elf catcher etc)

[mattgslater]

Just downloaded. Will read. Professional editor, will help you after I finish my (finally moving) playbook for PE.

Sorry for the long delay, Martin. A combination of putting you off for more urgent things, and more time spent researching and replaying than I had thought. You'd be surprised how many different working PE strategies there are!

[garion]

bump. feedback?

[juck101]

I read some of the first one at speed and it looked very good.

I actually prefer the extar detail in your document and it covers pretty much elf play in general. This is a good thing

[Smurf]

I suppose that is time for another poll.

I thought 22 pages was too much and maybe squished down to at least half that. Although Pretty pictures do take up space.

[garion]

yup agred, I will keep the pictures in because the break up the writing and look good.

However there is a fair bit of repition and overly long sentances. I think I will be able to get it down to about 18 maybe back up to 20 if i add more stuff about scoring one turn touchdowns, but i dont think it really needs it.

[poochée]

great playbook, as was to be expected after the other two!
Please don't cut down on content, I am always happy when I find out you are doing a play book because it means I get to read a big chunk of good ideas and tips!